English 2100: First-Year Writing

It’s coming out extremely well. I was having major problems with my paper for about two weeks now. Besides from being sick and all the other personal drama going on in my life, I was having problems with the sources. The sources that I found during our “source class” just decided to vanish. I e-mailed them to my e-mail and when I clicked on the link to view them it forwarded me to a login page - the problem was I didn’t have a username or password. HOWEVER, I contacted the library and they were able to answer all of my questions extremely quickly - with grace I may add. The librarian was able to pinpoint my problem really easily. I really recommend using them, especially for research papers, I know I will. Besides from that, I have found many sources including articles and journals and a really good article in the New York Times that I found about three days ago - Im excited for it! Anyway, Im kind of behind with the process as of today, however, I tend to kick it in to gear. I have finished my draft and I am really confident in it for what it is. Hopefully I get some good feedback and I finish the semester off with a great paper.  Best Regards,Richard Swanson  P.S. Hope i didn’t sound like I was making up excuses in the beginning bit. I was just telling you “the journey” of my essay. =D

Dear All,
Please keep in mind that tomorrow is the last day I can accept Essay 3 drafts.  Without a draft turned in by classtime tomorrow (which is still late), I will not be able to read your draft and conference with you by next week.  I can not accept emailed drafts.  Good luck with all your work, Professor Smith

Right now my paper is frustrating me.  I spent the whole weekend working on it and still feels inadequate.  Its really hard to get sources about dorm life and commuter colleges.  I find many through the library databease but they tend to be dated past the 1990’s.  I went to search for books in the library and wasnt to lucky but I’ll have to go again.

my paper is coming along swimmingly right now. I know what material from the movie “Wild Style” that I’m going to use. I know what articles I am going to use and I know what my motive and thesis is. This is probally the most prepared ive ever been for a paper.

So far I am doing pretty good on the research part of my paper. I actually haven’t done any writing yet though, just brainstorming. I think it will be an easy paper to come up with at least 6-8 pages however. There is a lot of information that I can present to the reader, both factual and opinionated, from a wide range of sources. I am also 100% certain I will be sticking with this topic since I have no doubts about it so far. Hopefully by the end of the weekend I will have a nice draft completed that I can bring in and share the members of my group.

As of right now i am a little iffy about my topic. It seems too broad and the research that i have been doing were not too successful. Everywhere i go, i seem to be getting the same research and opinions about double standards. I am not quite sure that i will be able to write 6-8 pages on this. But with alot of personal experience and relating to the topic hopefully i will be able to fill up the 6-8 pages. As of right now i have my introduction down which i dont think is quite bad. Its the body paragraphs that i am mostly concerned with.

I have recently started gaining information on my topic, since I decided to change it a couple days ago. I don’t think my problem will be with finding information but putting it all together into my paper. Also I think I might have some trouble with deciding what is important and should be included in my paper and what information might be considered unrelated and discarded.  Right now I am finding sources and copy pasting essential information that I am considering quoting. I am also finding information that is useful and putting it in to my own words so I don’t have to worry about that later. I am also trying constantly to remind my self to know which sources I use and save them before closing the windows.  I just need to get SICKO again so I can jot down information from there and maybe also use some quotes and examples from there. I still need to get a lot more information so I am still doing that. I hope to have everything I need by friday so I could get my paper draft done and have a chance to relax one weekend, and not be doing work the whole thanksgiving break. I’m worried that my paper will be a mess of information and doesn’t get the point across. I was wondering if I should use examples from people’s lives, like examples from the movie or if that would be unrelated? Should I just focus on ‘how health care could be changed in the US, and how free health care works perfectly well in many other countries’, without giving any personal examples? Or would the examples add to my paper by giving it some emotion, allowing you to feel grief for topics like, ‘how medical expenses could ruin a person life’, or how ’if health insurance wont cover procedures it could lead to death’? Those are somethings I have been thinking about so far on my paper.

In writing this paper I hope to answer the questions: Is a free health care system possible in america? What other developed countries have a free health care system, that functions without any problems? Does free health care mean, less care and attention from health care workers? How about medication costs, How is a $120 in US but the same drug is 5 cents in Cuba? I don’t know if those are too many questions to answer or not enough but we will see. I will certainly getting a lot of information from SICKO I just have to order is from blockbuster again since my parents returned it. As other sources for information I think that I will heavily rely on the library databases to have all the information I might need; if I can’t get much info from the databases then I will search for reliable websites for information. I am also thinking about finding discussion boards to see how people feel about health care and insurance.  I feel that it is important to get peoples opinions because health-care workers and industries could say that they have the best emergency care then you hear about people waiting in the emergency room for 10 hours while they are bleeding. I might be exaggerating a little, but I’m sure I would find a story similar to that if I were searching for it. Also I am going to try to stay open minded and look at this issue from all angles. I will look at the people who don’t have health insurance or have health insurance that excludes everything they may need. I will look at people who have full coverage. I will look at it from the health insurance and health care institutions point of view. I hope to prove that a health care system that would please all side of this issue is possible. I will begin my paper first by getting a lot of research and trying best to answer my questions.

I will be writing on the topic of health care in the U.S. While watching Micheal Moores documentary SICKO, I just got frustrated because the way the system is set up the poor get poorer while the rich get richer. Also I was really bothered and sickened by the stories that people were explaining, I just kept thinking this is RICICULOUS! A man decided to to some woodwork for his house himself and due to a freak accident he loses his middle and ring finger to the table saw. The cost to re-attach the middle finger was something around 20,000 and the ring finger was something like 9,000; his doctors asked which finger he would like to keep. That is absurd! While he is trying to save money doing some work himself he looses his fingers and can barely afford to re-attach one. Also the ring finger cost is double the price?!?! WTF!?!? Sorry but that is what I immediately thought when I heard this story. In this paper I hope to figure out how a free health care system could be set up in america. I know I wont be actually be making it happen but I would like to see that it would be possible.

As of right now I am working on finalizing my thesis as well as starting on my introduction. I think I will be having some trouble in finding any information on culinary arts in the library database. So far my searches through the library’s website has brought me little to nothing to work with. Although my initial searches has not been as succesful as I had anticipated, I am sure I will find useful sources in other places. I plan in  aiming my search efforts towards magazine articles and possible culinary periodicals written by actual chefs on their experiences on a culinary lifestyle. Other than difficulties in finding tangible sources, I think I would not have any trouble writing about my topic.

Essay Three writing is going pretty smoothly.  Right now, I am still in my very early stages.  I am crafting my opening statesments somehwhat, however I am mainly still doing a whole lot of research.  I am having concerns about the amount of research I am not finding on the library search.  Originally in class, I found a helpful article but then when I went to go find it at home it wasn’t there.  There is a lot of information on the internet but I need to find more details through the databases.  My next step would be to determine what sources I am actually going to use and how helpful they can be. 

Writing this paper is fairly simple because it’s a subject that I actually know about.  Starting the paper for me is always hard so i start with the body and go back to do the introduction.  This paper is flowing easily; I haven’t really ran into any problems just yet.  My next step is to finish all of my thoughts then go back and finish my introduction.  I’m not sure what i need help with yet because I just started writing it.  If i run into any complications, I will be sure to ask  

Well RIGHT NOW, I am actually sealing my design so I can spray paint the binding. As far as translating everything I’m doing into something that would be entertaining to read, I still worry. Most of all I continue to worry about reliable academic sources. My topic idea doesn’t seem to fit the specifications. That being said I am worried about interesting my reader, much like Anton. A truly personal issue is difficult to communicate with others. My biggest concern is translating the emotion I carry whilst doing these things into an essay. When I speak to people about this project they say “wow.” I don’t think anyone is going to read a seven page aper about building a guitar and be impressed; not unless I include pictures. My next step is drafting. While it’s probably not the best idea, I’m going to attempt to write first before I include sources. If it’s good then I’ll probably feel a lot better about my crummy sources.

This essay is turning out to be one of the most unnecessarily complicated pieces of writing I ever had to do. I don’t understand how one can take a very specific personal topic and turn it into a research essay anyone would care about. Unless the reader is doing a report on the life of the writer this project doesn’t make sense to me. How can I make something so personal interesting to others? But fine; I’ll try.

So far I’m going down my list of sources and writing up summaries for each of them. What I’ve noticed, what I’ve learned about the experience, whether or not it was a good idea… etc. Basically, this is the research part of the paper. No actual drafting has been done. One of the problems I ran into was the fact that THERE ARE SO MANY COMPUTERS out there and I am being referred to more of then than I can handle. I came back from Best Buy the other day and made a short summary of what the representative and I discussed. He recommended 6 different models. How on earth can I work with six different computers?! I suppose this could be a good part of the paper: there are a ton of laptops out there and half of them aren’t worth a thing. Secondly, I found a book about the things one should look for in a computer to get the best for their money. It was filled with nonsense about things no one actually needs to know. On the bright side, I learned what a PCMCIA was… although if you asked me what a chipset was I wouldn’t be able to answer you.

Seacrest Leynov out.

P.S. Isn’t this 3.4?

So far my paper is going well, I found a lot of sources that involve being a police officer. Right now I’m working on finding sources that involve the music industry. Based on my knowledge of the music industry my thesis is leaning in the direction of being in music management instead of being in the law enforcement industry. I found data showing how mentally damaging being in law enforcement could be, but I also found data showing the benefits of being a police officer. As of right now I’m still uncertain which way I will go with my paper. If I’m still in doubt about careers I think i will write a paper showing both sides of the careers, both good and bad. It’s hard to come to a conclusion when I feel so strongly about both career fields, but i guess I have to come to some type of decision.

I think my paper is going pretty well. The way I would outline my paper would be to start it off with why I am so afraid of speaking out in class. Then, I’d discuss the reasons (or at least what I think the reasons are) why I am so shy and the obstacles/mishaps I went through in the past that affected the person I am today. I’d also mention several situations that I’ve been through that caused me a great deal of anxiety (even though almost everytime I had to present, I’d panic like crazy!). After talking about myself, I will start talking about my findings and how others, like me, dealt with their situations. I will first research why people are so nervous and anxious when it comes to speechmaking. Then, I will find the psychological and environmental effect of it. And afterwards, I’ll read other people’s situations and reactions in a classroom that’s similar to mine. After finding out all these factors, I will find ways of overcoming such fear, so that I’d be able to voice out my opinions without being afraid of what others may say/think. However, I think I will have a problem with my counterargument because I’m not sure if it is right or good enough. Also, I have not yet found all of my 6 sources, but I am getting there. I haven’t completed my paper enough to find flaws in it (YET) because I am talking about how public speaking affected me. However, I hope to be able to ask for help later on in this paper from you guys! =)

    I started researching on my paper, and truthfully, I was starting to not like what I saw. I knew the managerial spot will be hard but worthwhile. Except now I realize that it really is not for me. Before I decide to go specific in to the managerial position in Dubai, I decided to research the different positions and the nature of the work. Apparently, there a more than 5 types of managers, each in charge of different aspects of a hotel. The general manager, where I want to be, can take over 15 years. You can’t graduate form college with a degree in either business administration or hotel management and get the job straight. You have to work from all the way in the bottom of the managerial positions. Plus, the salary is not great, even if you are in Dubai, where the currency is worth more than the U.S. dollar. And the average hour a general manager of a hotel will have to work more than 60 hrs a week. A 7 star hotels, like most in Dubai, will probably have to work a lot longer and have to deal with hotel patrons.

As you can see, it does not sound as  great as I expected. However, this research made me realize one thing. It not the hotel business that I actually want to go into. I want to travel. I want to go to exotic places like Dubai. That is what I am longing for. I am certain of going into the business industry, so I might even go into International Business. Anything that will allow me to travel.

So  I decided that my topic question will not be on should I  go into the hospitality business, and if I do, should I manage a hotel in Dubai. instead, my topic shall now be “Should I go into the Hospitality Business or Should I pursue a different Business Career”.

                So far, everything is going well. I already have 4 sources– a book, a newspaper article from the internet, an internet blog, and my dad, who went to Denmark. I am currenly confused on what is an internet source. Isn’t a daily news article from the internet an internet source, or is it a source derived from newspaper? I don’t know what does that mean. So answer that for me, please. I just need two more sources, so if you can tell me some then please suggest some. Also, i have divided my essay or have begun to do so. so far i have done this.

Intro–specify thesis and motive and point of essay
body:
a)details of Denmark and its culture
b) stating the benefits, which are divided into career and cultural exchange opportunities
c)problems I will face, divided into cultural problems, spending, and etc and how i will overcome them
d) the main counterargument which almost stopped me from making a decision to go there.
Conclusion–sum it all up.

I DONT KNOW WHAT ELSE TO ANSWER. ANY MORE INFORMATION I SHOULD ADD? I NEED TO KNOW. PAYCE.

I have come to a conclusion that the career I want is in the field of business. The problem is that I’m not sure what part of business. I’m not sure whether to go into accounting or finance. So, I plan on investigating the pros and cons of both careers. I plan on using some websites on financial corporations such as Meryl Lynch to see what they do exactly or accounting firms such as Deloitte and Touche. I also have an accounting teacher from high school that I can interview and use his information as a source. I had another business teacher from high school that worked on Wall Street for many years. My questions now are where would I make the most money and be happy at the same time?    I also want to know whether or not I would be happy working in either of these fields. Maybe after this paper, I will change my mind completely.  

For my topic on whether I should tranfer out o an away college or stay home for college I plan to explore the pros and con for each option.  I would also look for some personal websites to see what others feel about this topic being that im not the only person thinking about the issue.  I will also look for some non-commercial websites like edu’s and org’s because their information is more credible.  The questions i hope to answer are: Is it better for me and my future to leave the city for a while as a change of pace? and Is it harder to be on your own in college as I think it will be?